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Chinese Burn
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When you grabbed my hand
it hurt me,
somewhere deep
inside.
Around my heart, a band
was wrapped tightly,
to keep
my blood alive.
You twisted my skin around,
to make me
cry out,
in pain.
Waiting for that sacred sound;
but I, bravely
said nought
...no complaint.
"Does it hurt?" you asked,
I said "Yes",
it hurt
within.
You left my arm harrased,
a mark of ditress
was burnt
on skin.
There was no deliberate intention;
Just a game played
by boys,
like you.
I exercised so much repression,
hoping I'd made
a toy
of you.
And you were quite surprised,
but you smiled
so pleasantly
at me
That the anxiety I'd despised,
Away was led,
so quickly;
so beautifuly.
it hurt me,
somewhere deep
inside.
Around my heart, a band
was wrapped tightly,
to keep
my blood alive.
You twisted my skin around,
to make me
cry out,
in pain.
Waiting for that sacred sound;
but I, bravely
said nought
...no complaint.
"Does it hurt?" you asked,
I said "Yes",
it hurt
within.
You left my arm harrased,
a mark of ditress
was burnt
on skin.
There was no deliberate intention;
Just a game played
by boys,
like you.
I exercised so much repression,
hoping I'd made
a toy
of you.
And you were quite surprised,
but you smiled
so pleasantly
at me
That the anxiety I'd despised,
Away was led,
so quickly;
so beautifuly.
EDIT: This is poem no.2 from a series.
Poem no.1: [link]
Poem no.3: [link]
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Yes...um...you may take this literally or figuratively...it's meant to be both (seriously, my arm still hurts )
I have one particular question: Does the rythm and the way it's written show the main emotion (anxiety)?
Poem no.1: [link]
Poem no.3: [link]
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Yes...um...you may take this literally or figuratively...it's meant to be both (seriously, my arm still hurts )
I have one particular question: Does the rythm and the way it's written show the main emotion (anxiety)?
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Very vivid, and you would have to supress yourself to NOT feel something. I like.